Final Fantasy Adventures

[lordevil333]

All right, here is the first episode of my new series: A Crappy Run-Off of 8-Bit Theater.
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And here are the links to the others:
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http://i4.photobucket.com/albums/y128/lordevil/13RO.png (Latest!)

[Rezero]

I know you say its 'BASED' off of 8-Bit, but it rather comes off as a badly-done ripoff. But that's just my opinion.

[lordevil333]

I know you say its 'BASED' off of 8-Bit, but it rather comes off as a badly-done ripoff. But that's just my opinion.

Like I said, I suck at this.

[Meister]

Holy crap. Twelve posts in a row, dude? Absolutely not. If we have a rule against two posts in a row, what makes you think twelve are okay? Please delete eleven of those and put the comic links in the remaining one - they won't show up directly that way, but them's the breaks. By tomorrow. I'll check.

And while you're at it, read the rules again - if you've missed that one rule, which is pretty big around here, you're likely to have missed a few others.

[Loyal]

Incredible level of multiposts aside...

Story: As Rezero said, it's too much of an 8BT knockoff. That aside, I see no real plot. Things move along too jumpily, with no explantion (Implied or otherwise) given along the way. Where did that monster come from? Where'd the second one come from? What the hell were they doing in the first place?

Presentation: This is MOSTLY okay. Speech is easy to see and, save some spelling/grammar mistakes here and there, mostly coherent. Most of the sprites are resized properly, always keep that up. The problem, however, is in three parts.

1) The sprites. They're too generic. You have FOUR copies of a standard Fighter, a standard Black Mage, and another Fighter who dumped bright yellow paint over himself. You should try to put more effort into the recolors, or better yet, edit them creatively (You're the artist here, you figure it out).

2) The other parts of the comic. The background is not good. It is VERY BRIGHT, which burns readers' eyes and lowers the score. In addition, it's way too bland. Nobody would kill you if you used pre-done backgrounds from games, which is an option. Actions are too abrupt. One moment we have folks walking along, the next, a monster appears out of nowhere and kills everyone (with equal abruptness and nothing to indicate it save a lot of blood). Sound effects, little "Hit" flashes, all these things are GOOD things to help you tell your audience when something has just happened. Making them guess everything is bad.

3) The format and whatnot. First is the biggest part: You saved 'em in JPG. You apparantly know the effects of this on sprites, and even though you said you wouldn't after episode 4, it's quite apparant that you still save it as a JPG. Save them as PNGs or GIFs. Just remember: Sprites hate JPGs. Ah, and the title. "Final Fantasy Adventures". This leads or has lead many (Including myself) to think this comic based off the GAME Final Fantasy Adventures (Remade into Sword of Mana, I think you get the point). Might want to change the title into something less... Misleading. =\

[Mondt]

3) The format and whatnot. First is the biggest part: You saved 'em in JPG. You apparantly know the effects of this on sprites, and even though you said you wouldn't after episode 4, it's quite apparant that you still save it as a JPG. Save them as PNGs or GIFs. Just remember: Sprites hate JPGs. Ah, and the title. "Final Fantasy Adventures". This leads or has lead many (Including myself) to think this comic based off the GAME Final Fantasy Adventures (Remade into Sword of Mana, I think you get the point). Might want to change the title into something less... Misleading. =\What I got from his saying that is that he noticed it after episode 4, although he had already saved them all. I think.

[lordevil333]

There, I deleted all of the posts except one. Happy now? And yes, I am very aware now that I suck majorly at comics. I also came up with a new title: A Really Frickin' Crappy Run-Off of 8-Bit Theater.

[Meister]

There, I deleted all of the posts except one. Happy now?
Why yes, I am happy you're no longer actively ignoring the forum rules that you explicitly accepted. Thanks. ^_^

[lordevil333]

Sorry about that whole posting twelve times in a row thing, Meister. I'm going to go look at the rules again and make sure I don't break them this time. Oh, and by the way, if anyone has any suggestions on how to make my comics better, PLEASE let me know.

[Major Blood]

I have the best piece of Sprite Comic advice anyone can give.

Read this. (http://www.fragile-minds.com/crashnbass/donts.html)

Also, use squares for your text boxes. The text fits more easily in them.

[Loyal]

Thanks, Major. I was having difficulty locating that link.

*Ahem* Just for a note, lordevil, you don't have to have only one post for comics. So long as it isn't consecutive posts, you can just post new comics later in the thread (However, it's a good idea to keep the first post updated with links to recent ones so people don't have to search frantically through the thread). You don't have to edit the first post each time, which is quite cumbersome and leaves newer readers lost and confused.

[Lunar Spirit]

Well, this is a funny one. Why? 'cause you posted the same thing over at BGC (http://forum.blueglasscomics.com), except you had a whole different thing. Under the same name. Now THAT's confusing!

Really, though, consider what I said over there. Try Final Fantasy Adventures (the real game.) I've never seen a sprite comic on that.

Say, ARE there any sprite comics that use old gameboy graphics?

[lordevil333]

Okay, here is today's Episode. Now if you'll excuse me, I must go clip my toenails.
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